Changeset 35216

Timestamp:

2021-07-02T13:33:37+12:00 (3 years ago)

Author:

davidb

Message:

Text tweaks

File:

• main/trunk/model-sites-dev/eurovision-lod/collect/eurovision/transform/pages/about.xsl (modified) (2 diffs)

main/trunk/model-sites-dev/eurovision-lod/collect/eurovision/transform/pages/about.xsl

@@ -123 +123 @@
         we suggest you
         start by exploring the assembled information through
-        the browsing tabs.  For example:
+        the browsing tabs:  
         <ul>
           <li><a href="{$library_name}/collection/{$collName}/browse/CL3">Browse by countries</a>
-          if you want (for instance) to reminisce about songs your country have entered in the past; or</li>
+          is useful if you want to (for instance) reminisce about songs your country have entered in the past; or</li>
           <li><a href="{$library_name}/collection/{$collName}/browse/CL4">Browse by years</a> if
-          you are curious about who were the countries competing in that inaugural year of 1956.</li>
+          you are, for example, curious to see which countries competed in that inaugural year of 1956.</li>
         </ul>
       </p>
@@ -249 +249 @@
         In the following visualization, which shows the votes countries awarded to Italy,
         the size of the boxes are proportional to the total number of votes that
-        country award to Italy, with colour used to highlight differences between
+        country awarded to Italy, with colour used to highlight differences between
         Jury and Televoting: a reder (hotter) colour shows that the popular (tele) vote
         from that country was more keen (hotter!) for the song than the jury.